Moriah Leila

“ And aura,” he begins to answer, “is everything. It is the reflection of our souls, our state of mind, our very life. And should be An. Then my mine ...

This one I feel is a lot of telling and a bit boring but it has quite a bit of brackground information on Cassandra and I tried to keep the ...

Your plot is very interesting and I like how everything is overly perfect in Sunnyville. However there are several areas that I think need a little improvement. Number 1: Your ...

For Flemzo's Terrible Writing Prompts contest.. Prompt #3. Kennedy’s adventures all began with a man in a blazing red Camaro. He sped down the strip throwing wads of cash out ...

Hope you like it. I know it is kind of bland and nothing really happens but I have been working on this chapter for weeks and I have finally just ...

I'm back and have more for you. Hope this helps. I'll continue where I left off with the story and then go from there. If it gets confusing or you ...

Ha I was reviewing this chapter in the chapter four post for some reason..lol. ANyways I have a few nitpicks. Setting: I want more. I know someone has already covered ...

Okay, quick review...I didn't get a chance to read the other critiques so hopefully I don't repeat what has already been covered. Just minor details. I think your character development ...

Very good! I reread it to see if there was anything I could critique, My only real complaint is this line: I look down at my own attire. I am ...

I only have a short amount of time so I will just focus on one aspect of this chapter that I think needs improvement and then hopefully I will be ...

I really like this chapter. I enjoy how Rachel has come from this timid logical little mouse of a person and now suddenly she is impulsive and strong and emotional. ...

Aghh curse you!!! I am sooo jealous. There is so much going on in this picture and your details are amazing. I really like how nobody really has eyes. I ...

You are pulling me in deeper and deeper. I am so curiuos about Rachel's past and who this elligible bachelor is. Seems there is some sort of past with those ...

Very interesting!! However, I hae to say that I found it really hard to read in present tense. First person is okay, but I had to force myself to read ...

This is the prolouge to my newest story. Let me know what you think. Please be brutally honest. I know I don't go into too much character analysis but that ...